Hacienda El Cielo: Heart of Thirst
arkiteknikowl
General Fiction
On-going
1. Book Cover — I love the simplicity of your book cover. I also love how your book cover speaks for your book. You deserve a perfect score for this.
2. Title — I must admit it, I'm pretty impressed by your title. Why? Yung mga ganitong title ang tipo ko, lalo na pag mga ganito ang genre, pero kung pagbabasehan natin ang mga mambabasa na hindi naman talaga masyadong gusto ang pagbabasa? (yung mga walang standards, mga commoners lang pagdating sa pagbabasa), hindi masyadong mapapansin ang title mo lalo na kung hindi ka pa masyadong kilala. Please don't change your title!
3. Grammar — ngayon pa lang ako nakakilala nang taong gumagamit ng kan'yang sa simpleng kanyang o kaniyang (tama ang kan'yang, okay?). You amuse me! Pati yung mga tagalog na salita na hindi masyadong ginagamit ay nagamit sa istorya mo! Gosh! I really love how you write this story. You just need to watch out for your typos.
4. Contents — you narrate the story using the MC's POV (Main Character's Point of View) a bit too descriptive. It can cause a bore for some new readers with a too descriptive type of narration. Please lessen it a bit (suggestion). This kind of narration works for me but... Hindi para sa lahat ang ganitong narration (Wattpad is a big community of readers and writers, you must understand that some are a bit picky in the stories they read, this includes me as one of those readers... Readers do have a different taste at what book they wanna read, but most of them prefer light narrations).
5. Overall Impact — I'm actually loving your story! This story! The overall impact, I must say, is a perfect score! Malayo mararating mo! Hehe...
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Book Cover: 10/10
Title: 18/20
Grammar: 34/35
Content: 23/25
Overall Impact: 10/10
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Total Score: 95/100
¢σиgяαтυℓαтισиѕ!!! уσυ'νє мα∂є ιт тσ му яє¢σммєи∂є∂ ѕтσяιєѕ ℓιѕт!
ᏁᎬxᏆ sᏆᎾᏒᎽ: ᏆhᎬ bᎬᎪuᏆᎽ ᎳᎥᏆhᎥᏁ bᎽ arkiteknikowl
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Lay's Critique Shop 2020 (OPEN)
Não ficção[CLOSED-ON-GOING] Lay's Critique Shop 2020 WARNING!!! Inconsistent updates, busy si Lay (busy ako), do not call me Author/Miss Author/Miss A. Lay na lang (pronounce it in Filipino pronunciation, hindi Ley, okay? Lay talaga iyan...). H'wag maattitude...
