Title: Midnight Matter
Cover
I really like your cover a lot! No complaints here. The colors are nice and the design is really cool, I like the graphic novel vibe.
Blurb/Hook/Premise
"A mysterious element called Midnight Matter is introduced to the world after a meteor strikes the earth, of which only left one continent from being washed over."
Great concept, weird wording. Try
"Xx years ago, a meteor struck the earth and left only one continent behind, the rest washed over. It introduced a mysterious element called Midnight Matter, which does xxx and is highly coveted by xxx."
The next sentence has little to do with the premise. "On this final continent, a boy named Aster will arrive to achieve the dream of his own legacy." What does that mean and what does that have to do with Midnight Matter? I would reword your hook to connect this "boy" (who will be our MC I'm assuming) to the premise (hopefully he has something to do with the Midnight Matter). I would also tell us when this goes down and maybe a bit about what Midnight Matter is (which you can do while still maintaining mystery).
Character Analysis
Aster, Rosie, and Jawed are great characters to follow along in this journey. They fit well in this world and I admire their determination. Aster really stuck out to me as the more sarcastic character who isn't afraid to admit it when he doesn't know or understand things. He was my favorite of the trio.
Opening Chapters
The first chapter introduces us to your world and your mechanics. Through a conversation with an "old man," we learn about weapons that give wielders supernatural abilities and magical powers. Really cool idea here. We also meet Aster, Rosie, and Jawed. They are on their way to the continent where each will receive one of these weapons that have been crafted out of this mysterious "Midnight Matter" that came to earth with the Meteor. Really awesome idea!
Plot
The plot follows these three characters as they master their weapons and go through training. Every chapter pursues the plot and doesn't stray. Good job staying focused on your premise, world, and story.
Worldbuilding/Setting
Exquisite world-building. A post-apocalyptic world finds magic again after the destruction of a meteor. It is shrouded in fog and mostly underwater. Survivors learn the disciplines of combat as they master their blades enhanced by this "midnight matter" drawn from the source of the comet. There are also different classes of warriors to that influence how the characters progress. They train to fight all sorts of things, including "demons." The author is creative as hell. I was really drawn into this world and the mechanics and I found it to be a really original idea.
Summary
Harry Potter trio/science fiction fantasy/post-apocalyptic/demon-slaying/anime read? What is this and why didn't I find it before? Genuinely one of the coolest concepts I've found on this site.
Your writing style is a little messy and confusing at times, I would suggest hiring an editor so that your original content can shine. An overall solid read, thank you for sharing it with me.
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