Author: Arzoelyn
Cover:
It's both good and professional in appearance. It's not cluttered, the title is a focal point, and the image works.
Blurb: I feel like you have a pretty good blurb, yet you went ahead and added an excerpt. It didn't need to be there, and in my humble opinion, should be removed. I didn't see any grammar concerns, so that's a good sign.
First Chapter:
Okay, so this is good. There are a couple of things I want to suggest, though. First, the chapter would hook more readers if it started closer to the car accident. The majority of the earlier chapter felt like an info dump, or in the case of the crush, boring. I continued reading for the sake of this review, and I'm glad I did, but the slow start will turn some people away. Now, to my second point. When I finished the chapter I was impressed. That's why I gave you the Cryptic Choice award, but I teetered back and forth on that decision. Your work, to me, felt like a well-done manuscript still needing to go through the rigors of a professional content edit. Basically, I feel like this would be perfect after that process. Look into it. Keep in mind, though, I didn't say anything about grammar. This needs content.
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