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22. Jeena hai Sirf tere liye

I have attached pictures because I realized its much easier to explain it this way.

Author— Charmedone22

Anika and saumya's bonding was cute. It was nice how these sisters conversed. An about ShivOmRu they were awesome as always.

SK. AKS. And what not. What the actual fudge? Dude, this is confusing as hell. Don't write like this.

Goodness. The paragraphs were so long. You know you should separate paragraphs properly. Give space after each dialogue. It goes very messy when you don't give space.

For example—

"Hey" Gauri greeted Anika.

"Hi" Anika replied.

Write like this, instead of writing this way—

Second, don't mention that the conversation is going on between these people and that people. Readers will eventually know who are talking.

Third, please describe the dress. Don't simply just attach picture. Hey there reader, I got ready and wore this dress👇

Will you bother explaining? Why the hell am I reading this story? This is annoying. I hate it when people do this.

Also, links for dress. Who has so much time to open a link when you can't even copy and paste it? Sorry, but I don't. Please try and make an effort for your reader.

Don't separate the scenes by telling this is Shivika scene, now rumya  and that... Either combine them or separate like this—

You can even use symbols like this– '*' or '+' or any other you like.

The chapters were too short. Literally too short.

Quick tip–

•Don't change perspectives. When you have so many leads then write in third person's perspective only.

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