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31. Misunderstandings

ObsessedWithMyself

I mean the description was good. It was short and yet at the same time it left a tinge of mystery to it. I was quite happy with the description. The concept was good to be honest. But then I got to reading...

I'm sorry but it wasn't what I really expected. You see the story would have been loads better if you had just stayed in Om's perspective or in third person perspective. And please don't use emoji. Please, that's a request. It really really breaks the flow of the story badly.

Second, mind using full names. Even if you are not writing in inverted commas then at least write full names.

Third, well if you actually want the story to feel like a book then a rcommened you write in inverted commas. It gives the book actual feels. You totally cut the description part which is one of the main aspects in a story. How is a reader supposed to feel emotions when the author doesn't give directions?

So these are the major things you need to work on. I can't state everything because honestly I think that would turn out to be pretty discouraging. And please drop by your thoughts. That's the least you could do, nai? Reckon you could do that, ey?