27. When imagination goes wild

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Author— aksianayar

The story was good. I mean the whole getting Shivaay-to-become-bhikari was awesome. The characters, just like you wanted them to be like serial, were how they were supposed to be. That jealous SSO is my fav. He's so cute when he's jealous.

Tips—

•Write in inverted commas. It not a play.

•Please use only one exclamation or question mark. We do understand that the statement is important when you use exclamation mark.

•We need description. At least something. They are only dialogues in this. It feels like I'm reading a play. Where are the emotions? The feels? Please you killed it with the dialogues but blew it up in the description part.

•Don't let your opinion seep into your writing. It'll turn out good.

Well yeah duh how are readers supposed to know how popular the Oberois are instead of writing that they obviously

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Well yeah duh how are readers supposed to know how popular the Oberois are instead of writing that they obviously. How are readers supposed to know? It's okay as long as it is in first person's perspective.

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