Author— Noxholic_miss
The concept was nice. I haven't read anything like that till date. It felt new and refreshing. The flashbacks were cute. Adorable as well.
I'll only point out a few things. First, take care of capitalization. There was nowhere when you have capitalised 'I' mainly.
Please use the period sign only once not like this—
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Now see this—
You are mad. Totally mad.
“Mad? Mai? Same to you! Back to you and no return!” she replied again in full rage.
“How dare you call me mad? Himmat kaise hui tumhari? Janti bhi ho mai kaun hu? ” I answered back in full rage.
See the difference? These small things make a big deal.
Second, write a little more detailed description. It's very necessary because a reader should know what they are signing up for.
It was fine in rest of the areas. Just look after a few grammatical errors and spelling errors too.
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