Reviewed by Key-Keeper Ava
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Author: QuintexQuota
Title: Permanently Yours
Genre: Romance
Cover:
3/5
The word ‘yours’ is very hard to read and so is your name. The cover
itself is quite dull, you need it to be eye-catching to attract readers.
Blurb:
4.5/5
Amazing! My only recommendation is that you re-word the sentence
about his ACL to sound more dramatic and appealing as it is such a major thing in the story. For example ‘A completely torn ACL which
leaves him in almost constant pain chains him down.’
Title:
4/5
Interesting and catchy. Will interest readers looking for a good
romance/teen fiction story.
Plot:
8/10
There is only one real chapter to judge but I understand where you are going with it and am interested in what is going to happen.
Character Development:
11/15
It has only been one chapter so there is not much to review but the
characters are developing nicely. There is a few places where you say
‘enjoyable’ or ‘angry’. It would be much better if you described it more, such as ‘a feeling of complete euphoria takes over me. This is the first time I have really smiled all day’ or ‘by blood boils as anger radiates off of me in waves’
Spelling and Grammar:
8/10
A few errors but not very many. I would suggest a friend read over your work before you publish- a fresh set of eyes really helps.
Overall:
8/10
Other Comments:
The book is based on a great idea which is very unique, readers should be excited about how the story is going to progress. One of your
strengths is that you provide detailed descriptions of people and places
that help the reader create an image in their mind. Your weakness s
describing emotions. Emotions are a crucial part of character
development.
There is your review! I hope it provides an insight into how you can improve your writing!
-Key-Keeper Ava
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