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Ava: Fright School

Reviewed by Keeper-Ava Avocados12

Title: Fright School
Author: kacquah

Cover:
1/5
The picture is quite boring and it is impossible to read the title. I highly recommend change.

Blurb:
2/5

The blurb definitely captures the story but is very boring. Try to add some action, something to hook
readers. For example:
‘Vampires. Werewolves. Mummies. Zombies. (*)
Fright school has them all. Each race keeps to themselves, with little to no contact.
All that changes when a powerful Warlord takes control. Five teens from each race are thrust together,
with their only chance at survival to be found in each other.(**)
Each individual must overcome their differences and work together, using each other unique abilities to
overcome the seemingly impossible obstacles and uncover the secrets that determine their fate.
But each of them harbours secrets of their own.’
(*) I didn’t read far enough to know all the races.
(**) I also didn’t read far enough to know how many.
See how tTitles more intriguing?

Title:
4/5
Sums up your story nicely.

Plot:
8/10

The plot sounds very interesting! A bunch of individuals with different backgrounds from different races
putting aside their differences aside to save their way of life. This is definitely a book I would love to
read on future.

Character Development:
12/15

I know what all the characters look like, your detailed descriptions are excellent. You also set the scene
very well. The only thing I suggest is trying to do more showing rather than telling. Show that someone is
angry by their fists curling, blood boiling etc.

Spelling and Grammar:
7/10

I picked up a few spelling errors but nothing major. There are a few sentences that are a bit jumpy and
could be improved with some text connectives.

Overall:
8/10

Other Comments:

Your strength: Description.
Each character and scene is carefully described which gives readers a detailed mental image.

Your weakness: Chapter structure/placement.

I didn’t really know what to call this. Your chapters are a bit oddly structured. Not in the plot, that is well paced, but in content. I recommend making a new part/chapter every time you change point of view.
This would help avoid confusion. Also, why are there three or four chapters all titled the same? I
understand they would be too long together and you don’t have to change the name but it is confusing
when you have read three chapter ones, just call them one, two and three.
Overall this book sounds awesome! I would love to read it when I have more time on my hands! I hope
my review was helpful and insightful. Sorry for the wait.

♡Key-keeper Ava