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Loving him

Author: Angelic_Fly

Review by angelshiva

Chapters read - 10

Title

A simple one still apt one for your story. It totally suits your basic plot and definitely matches with how the story is written in Saanjh's pov. Not to forget loved the simple yet elegant cover❤️

Blurb

It's the base of every story and surely it is well written. Still i feel it could be more better and innovative. I would say once do proof read it, a little of grammar and punctuation mistakes are there.

Plot

Coming to the basic plot it is good and loving the way you are carrying the storyline. As already mentioned I surely liked how the whole story is written in Saanjh's pov as it helps to relate with title and blurb.

Grammar

The main point where your story lack somewhat. As already mentioned in blurb portion also, I am not saying about grammar in wholely. It's fine but point which lack is sentence construction. It's written nicely in simple language still I will recommend to proof read it. You will get there are many punctuation mistakes and at some points lack of sentences construction.  Like you have used comma after every but, and, then these are already used for joining a sentence only. You doesn't need to use comma here.

Overall

All in all its a nice story. For the readers who don't concentrate on good grammar and very well Sentence construction, I can surely recommend your story. Just the suggestion is proof read it work on the points and it's really nice one. 👍

Payment

A permanent follow and honest comment on my book Stolen Words.

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