Talking from the implicit point of view the title doesn't really make literal sense, it sure sounds humourous and some people might go on to read the book because of that but we can't deny the fact that there is no tight meaning behind it. But viewing it from the explicit point, it is relevant to the story and lays a direct connection with it. So the title might be confusing but the positive factors are strong enough to over power it.
[ ˗ˏ✎ Reviewer's Tip :- I like how you have made the title's setting in a way that it resembles the font used in the cover of the book "perks of being a wallflower". But it would be great if you could change the last half of the title into something more relevant in the sense that it would display a proper meaning when read 'without' context. ]
» Cover :: 6/10
The cover looks clean and simple just like the story, I like the paper effect that is used because it directly links to the story via the fact that through the story, Yoongi writes letters. It might not be very eye catchy but it stays relevant to the story so it's not a complete loss. It would have been great if the font used in the cover could be the font you used in the title, I hope you know why I am saying that. Adding some paper or vintage filters could have been better. The author's name is blending with the background, it needs to be more bold.
[˗ˏ✎ Reviewer's Tip :- If you could use the effect of a crumpled paper on the cover, I personally think it would look great since Yoongi is writing letters and when we are usually writing in a piece of paper, most of the time we end up crumpling it. That would give the cover a more realistic look, this is just a mere suggestion, it completely depends on you if you want to change it or not. ]
» Blurb :: 2.5/5
The blurb starts with a dialogue which is a great way of starting as it always catches attention. When the readers get a flavour of the story in the blurb itself, it is very difficult to not read the story then. But the disappointing fact is the blurb ends there, just a dialogue is not enough in some cases, you could have given a little insight of the situation along with it and state the main reason of conflict, this is what sums up the whole blurb.
[˗ˏ✎ Reviewer's Tip :- After the dialogue you can add something in that justifies the title then and there or something that throws a little light on the situation, since this is a spin off and not a sequel, people might not have read the original one shot before and came straight to your story and might be deciding to read the one shot later. In that cases the whole situation might become inconvenient. ]
Dawn :: 6/10
Now the starting of the book was great, the prologue/introduction chapter was quite helpful and the story starts off pretty smooth. The only problem I faced was 'no context'. Like I mentioned earlier, I came straight to this book thinking it's a spin off so it's okay if I read it right away but I was slightly confused. With spin offs the story is not much dependable on the original story because the spin off portrays a different side of the situation/story. It would have been great if you could have set the base first before catching up with the story.
In the introduction you have mentioned the original story is a must read but most of the time that's not the case. With sequels, the original becomes a must read but not with spin off. But then again it completely depends on you, how you want your story's setting to be, I just gave you the generalized idea and how the readers might pursue it.
[ ˗ˏ✎ Reviewer's Tip :- Just after the first two paragraphs, you could have made Yoongi explain the situation a little bit with, "Just to catch you up with the situation... happened." In that case the reader won't have to jump from books to books for context. It's not completely necessary but it's good to hold on to 'just in case'. ]
Plot and Idea :: 15/20
The story has a typical cohabitation/proximate quarters troupe, it's not something completely unique but the way the story flows is what makes it worth reading. The pace of the story isn't too fast but it isn't too slow either, although there are times when it gets a little slow and starts to bore out but gladly that doesn't continue for long. I want to applaud your attempt at humour throughout the story. Humor being subjective, I found the story displaying mainstream humour that is accepted and enjoyed by most of the people, I would talk about it more in 'writing style'. With quarantine, cohabitation is the troupe that is on rise so unfortunately I can't really credit you for it, but the events that occur are entertaining nonetheless.
[ ˗ˏ✎ Reviewer's Tip :- When you are going with a troupe that is already popular and has slowly become mainstream, you need to mend your plot in a way that it stands out from all the thousand different books of the same troupe. Few years ago, this troupe wasn't that famous but now it is, as the preferences change over time, competition to stand out the most also increases. So while sticking to the original plot, try to think out of box situations and actions that would keep the readers on edge. ]
Character and Emotions :: 15/15
This is my first time in almost a year of reviewing when I am giving a perfect score in a subcategory and I have to say that the book deserves it. Trust me when I say, it's so refreshing to see new character dynamics apart from the clichè, innocent girl, quirky best friend, I was so tired of it. The characters were relatable in their own way and I could relate so much to the girls, I rarely feel so connected to a story. Reading it from Yoongi's point of view helped me mentally relate with him as well. Well done!
Writing Style :: 11/15
The story goes on with an informal tone which is intended I think, it is not over done to a point where it would look childish but I think even though it's supposed to be informal, the sentence structures could be amended to make it look more impactful. Now the tone of humour, as I have already said is applaudable, there is a thin line between what is actual humour and just straight up cringe. Most of the authors think that the clumsy and quirky personality of the character is funny but it's not, that is rather cringe. But the tone of humour in the story focuses on how to make the story funny through points that readers could actually relate to.
[ ˗ˏ✎ Reviewer's Tip :- Focus on reconstruction of sentences, start from basics, for example, instead of writing in direct sentences like, "I am music major student, uni is stressful." You can write, "As a music major student, university is stressful." While you are using the narrative writing device, you need to maintain the tone of writing and make sure that even though it doesn't sound much professional, it shouldn't lose its impact and sound too nonchalant. ]
Grammar :: 16/20
I didn't find many grammatical, spelling or punctuation mistakes but I will list down the minor ones I saw :-
» There were places you misspelt 'taught' as 'thought' (letter ii & iii).
» Ellipsis (...) was not properly used in some places.
» You can use two punctuation marks one after another, for example '?!'.
» There were minute punctuation mistakes with commas and periods here and there so make sure you do a thorough proofreading.
TOTAL :: 75.5/100
Reviewer's Note :: I just want to say that I had a nice time reading the book and o absolutely can't shut up about how much I loved the female characters. When I read "no bad boy/good girl or rich boy/poor girl shit" I was thanking god that finally someone who feels the same way as I do! I hope you keep writing and keep improving, sincerely wish that this review was of any help. All the best with your writing and have a nice day <3
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