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Those Unsaid Words by  wild_imaginator16

REVIEWER : Reeya_Reader_Writer

I believe that feelings are the poetry of the heart. Poetry is that part of the language that directly touches your heart. And personally, I like poetry reading.

I would say the following things about your poetry work-

1. The title and cover, both are arresting. Both of these elements evoked emotions inside me. However, I would suggest you remove the subtitle on the top of the cover. And instead of writing that subtitle on the top you might simply write ' A poetry collection' at the right of your title. It will, I believe, enhance the overall look of your cover.

2. The blurb is good as far as a poetry collection is concerned. " Poetry, plucking the heartstrings and making music with them" is so beautiful. One can actually feel the beauty of poetry through this. Good job on this part.
It is not possible for me to give the review and analysis of each and every poem. But I can say one thing for sure- your poems, though written in simple language, are wonderful. I read each and every poem carefully, and I quite appreciate your thought process and the way you have brought out every emotion through your poetry.

3. Though I appreciate your work, there are a few things of which I would like you to take into account. Firstly the tenses. The tenses are intermingled. For example in the first poem, The Mourning Nature, the first paragraph is written in present tense and then there is a sudden shift from present to past tense in the second paragraph. And it is all due to one single word- 'wake'. Replace this word with its past form ( woke) and see the difference it makes in your entire poem. Go through your poems and you will find similar things. Try to work upon them.

Next, at one place you have written " Tears fell down from eyes". Now this isn't the correct way to describe a person who is weeping since it looks a bit out of the way. Replace it with " Tears roll down from eyes" and see the way it enhances your work. Usage of appropriate phrases always enriches a work.

Your poems are wonderfully written and worth the effort. I might soon add them to my reading list. Keep writing and all the best. Feel free to contact me for any kind of help. :-)