Yoon Hi Koi Mil Gaya Tha by daydreamingatnight19
REVIEWER : sharanyashiv7
i) Cover:
It's a simple one but yet attractive.
ii) Title:
A unique title, keep it up.
iii) Blurb:
A great work on blurb and you used descriptive words too, good choice on the words.
iv) Plot Development:
Plot is about a couple's love story(Urvi and the doctor) . I think the story has not yet reached the plot but try to develop the plot perfectly.
v)Character Development:
Good choice on the characters especially the female lead Urvi, she's fiery for now I can't say anything on character development as you only wrote a few chapters.
vi) Grammar and Punctuation:
Good job on punctuation, you had some mistakes, on the title 'Hi' it's 'Hee' but other than that you've a good vocabulary.
vii) Flow:
Excellent work on descriptive and script writing, try using thoughts.
viii) Reviewer Opinion:
1. Work on Character development.
2. Work on grammar mistakes.
This is advice from me rather than writing a couple's stories and trying writing different genres.
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