A Love Too Far by blinky_army4ever
Reviewer : sharanyashiv7
Title :
A suitable title for the story, very simple and a perfect one too.
Cover :
An excellent cover with good picture quality, the cover itself will definitely attract readers, keep it up.
Blurb :
It was a very simple description but it was an understanding one but though you could have made it more lengthy but not over lengthy. Good choice of words on the description.
Character Development :
First of all, good job on the selection and requirements of characters especially the main male leads and the female lead. Coming to character development, you worked excellently on the mental part but I couldn't see any development physically and emotionally, feeling is important in this part and I couldn't see it. Please work on character development this will make your story more intriguing.
Plot Development :
Well, the story has completed 25 chapters and you've predicted that you'll publish almost 85-100 chapters then complete the story hasn't reached the main plot yet but two main male leads have started finally for 'the recent IU', your plot is definitely awesome as she came to that world to modify that novel for a happy ending but it becomes complicated for her, good job.
Grammar and punctuation :
You had minor problems with sentence structures and you've used informal english, try using the formal one. Good work on Vocabulary as you've used new words in some chapters of your story. You had used unnecessary punctuations, please work out on that otherwise there isn't much grammar.
Flow :
The flow of the story is perfectly going on well. You have used descriptive, thoughts and script writing which means you combined all of them, a good job on that but try being more descriptive by using words and phrases as it's said 'SHOW don't TELL.'
Overall Opinion :
i) Your story is both creative and original, keep it up.
ii) Work on punctuations, language and sentence structures, if you're still confused on how to do all this just contact me I'll be very glad to help you.
iii) Mainly work on character development as this is the main thing needed for a story.
iv) Intriguing work on writing style, plot and flow these areas is your plus point
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