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Trials of Love by shreya_2099

Reviewer : sharanyashiv7

Cover :
The cover was very simple but the picture quality was superb.

Title :
An okay title as it matches the story but not perfectly as it's needed.

Plot Development :
The story has reached almost 5 chapters, the plot area has just arrived where the two friends have to manage the shooting done in the college and have to act with those two superstars. Plot is definitely attractive,eye-catching and unique. You've to work on the plot development though it still hasn't yet arrived.

Character Development :
An excellent work on the characters, whether it's the main characters or the side characters. Love the work done on Shreya's mental and emotional character. I love the conversation between Shreya and RDX(the professor), it was very funny and enjoyable. The students' character development was done well as the college students in real life, keep it up.

Grammar and Punctuation :
Well, your language was Hindi and you had some use of English language, so I had not seen any tough mistakes but there were minor ones. Work on the use of Formal English rather than Informal. Good work on Vocabulary and on the choice of words. You had a lot of Punctuation mistakes, I mean you use many commas and full stops, stop using it unnecessarily.

Flow :
Your story is going well. You use script writing, try using more descriptive words and phrases. Using three of them makes the story perfect.

Overall Opinion :

1) If you want, change the cover by asking a graphic designer.

2) Translate the hindi dialogues to English since many readers might not know the language.

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