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Word Count: 981
Title: Falling *summary help!*
Genre: Short story
Blurb:
She thought that wings would allow her to fly. But, she didn't know it stings to have it spread across the sky. So, she finally took a step away from her own héll. With a smile that wept the girl silently fell. ~ A short story of a girl and her demons. Be careful of what you wish for.
Status: Completed
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Starting Points: 30
Cover: I don't like it. I wouldn't open it if I saw it on my recommendations list, but who am I? Someone else may like it. Just isn't my cup of tea since it doesn't look very professional, but we all know I'm being difficult here. I still don't like it though. (-3)
Title: There isn't much to this title either. It's a one word title, and I usually don't like them. The same goes for this one. You won't lose points for it though.
Summary: Okay, so you requested for summary help! Problem is, I'm struggling to see why...and now I feel bad. You know what, I may just create a new system for summary help where the person can get accepted or denied if I think they truly need it, or if I think I can be of help. I don't know why I didn't think of this earlier. Don't kill me. Your summary isn't outstanding, I just simply think it works for this genre and for what this books seems to be encompassing is all? Like seriously, I don't see how I can help to improve this. We can brainstorm in PM if you want though, I'm always willing to help.
-Ew, I sound nice. Anyway, moving on!
Plot: Um....."A short story of a girl and her demons"?
-This doesn't sound the least bit of interesting to me. (-3)
Opening thoughts:
-*Sees a definition of a word as the first line in the book* *Frowns*
-Here we go again. (-2)
-So, this chapter is a poem. Um. I didn't sign up for this...haha. Seriously, I barely know anything about poems.
-Okay, I'll just give you my basic standpoint of this. Easy.
-This is corny. Like really corny. It descends onto the path of corniness at the line "The birth giver calls me whore."
*Pinches eyes*
-*Mariah Carey voice* Suddenly, I can't read. Suddenly, I want to close this book immediately. (-3)
-Those last three lines are horrendously bad. I'd suggest coming up with something actually emotionally jarring because all I did was roll my eyes. (-3)
