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Review 38 @moonlightbabe1606

Book: Life at its finest
Author: Moonlightbabe1606

REVIEW

1. First chapter blues

*  Summary / prologue - Good summary.

*  Intro to main character - Good intro to main character, Rose.

*  Intro to story - Good intro to story.

*  Intro to genre - Good intro to the genre teen fiction.

2. Story Settings

*  Description -There's need to describe how the characters look at different times of the day. You may have posted their photos, but describing them will help readers visualize them.

*  Theme - The themes in the story keep changing with circumstances. I think you the writer don't have a specific ending to this story, because a lot of things are happening in the 36 chapters that might have shifted the initial idea of the story.

*  Intrigue / Suspense factor - There is no intriguing scene or suspense in the story.

*  Relation to genre - Story is related to the genre, teen fiction.

*  Time setting - Timing is noted in the story.

*  Character development - The characters were relatable.

3. Story Tone

*  Grammar - Good grammar. No punctuation errors. Only limit the use of 'I' in a paragraph.

Example

It's fine been that nervous I guess. Even if this is the moment I've waited for so long. It's not that I'm not going to miss my father but it's just that I'm ready for adult life and I'm fed with the family dramas around, involving me.

Another version...

Been nervous is fine because I have long awaited this moment and not even the absence of my father can stop me. It's finally time to move on with my adult and avoid family dramas.

*  Dialogue - Good engaging dialogue with the characters.

*  Choice of words - Good choice of words for the book.

*  Chapter flow - Story flowed well from chapter to chapter.

*  Writing voice - Your writing voice is strong and engaging.

4. Creativity

*  Plot development - Okay... Over to the plotting. Your story was well plotted out but I think and the writer seem to be flowing randomly and everywhere with the story.

You have good characters with well developed background information but there's no strong theme to push the story forward.

Too many random stuff is going on and the chapters keep growing with much ado about nothing.

Normally a well plotted story should have a beginning, a middle and an expected end.

I guess it took ages for Damon to pop up. He is part of the main characters and he showed up after 17 chapters. That is a lot. But good though.

I would suggest to end the book here and start a sequel or a book two. That way all events about Rose and her family drama can be laid to rest with a fresh plot about how she finally gets to live happy ever after with the lucky guy (or not).

(my suggest...)

*  Writing style - Your writing style is natural and you have a way of bringing out the emotions of a scene. This actually keeps readers glued to your book. Good.

5. Personal thoughts - your story is great. Your writing style and diction, very catchy, good relatable characters. I would say stick with the original plot of the story and limit the random scenes that don't move the story.

*  Overall - I love this story really. You get a 10!