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Pativrata - by - shruthiravi13

Review done by: kyaaraa13

Genre: Historical Fiction/Hindu Mythology

Disclaimer: In this review, I have not crafted it the way I usually do, due to the book genre being Historical Fiction and Hindu Mythology.

Cover: The cover's color theme is very attractive. The pictures are blended nicely. The pictures chosen are royal and they give the feel of ancient times. The graphic designer has done a very well job there, but you can add some more elements, instead of just repeating the pictures of the two female protagonists.

Title: 'Pativrata' meaning dedicated to one's husband. You have chosen the title very wisely. The title will give the reader the impression that it is an Indian book and one with a dedicated wife. It is unique and suits the book as well.

Blurb: The blurb crafted looks very long as you have not used any paragraph breaks and punctuation as well as the tenses used are pretty bad. You need to edit it and make it feel more appealing. The blurb you have written when crafted in paragraphs makes a perfect prologue for your book.

Urmila grew up hearing the story of her aunt Sulochana from her mother Sunaina.

She knew her mother and aunt Sulochana were born from Vasuki's tears when Maa Parvati unknowingly tied Vasuki tightly to Shiva's neck. Since both Parvati and Vasuki fought for the children, Shiva decided to give one child to Parvati and another to Vasuki. Her mother was given to Parvati, who then gave her to Devi Narmada to raise.

Sulochana had grown up in Naglok and had become the bride of Meghnad, the formidable and divine prince of Lanka. Urmila, as a child, always wished to visit Lanka and meet her aunt. Sulochana also yearned to meet her nieces, Sita and Urmila, whose childhood pictures she had seen from the travelers from Mithila.

But the life in Lanka and her love for her beloved husband didn't allow her that. Worshipping Vishnu was banned in Lanka and King Janak was a keen devotee of Vishnu and it was said that the elder daughter of Janak Sita was Mahalakshmi herself.

Little did Urmila and Sulochana know their paths will cross in the most unexpected way. Instead of being the loving aunt and niece, they stood on two sides in the epic battle between their respective husbands, Meghnad and Lakshman.

But the blurb can be written as follows:

Urmila, the daughter of Sunaina and the niece of Sulochana, and not to forget the princess of Mithila, was married to the noble prince and the ideal brother of all times, Lakshman. She had grown up listening to the stories of her aunt from her mother.

Sulochana, daughter of Vasuki, grown up in Naglok, was the bride of Megnadh, the son of the immortal Lankekshwar Ravan. Always wished to meet her nieces, Urmila and Sita, seeing how cute they were, from their childhood pictures, finally met them.

But their meeting was not plausible. Instead of being the loving aunt and niece, they stood on two sides in the epic battle between their respective husbands, Meghnad and Lakshman.

Their love, their devotion, and their chastity played the most important role in the outcome of that decisive battle.

The story traces the journey of Urmila and Sulochana and how the duty-bound and chaste daughter of Janaka overcame the divine and chaste power of the princess of Naglok, who is also her aunt.

DISCLAIMER: The story is based on the folklore of Sunaina and Sulochana were born from Vasuki's tears.

Blurb crafted by @kyaaraa13

Cover Credits: Proteeti from Indiaforums.

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09/04/2021 - #24 womanpower

and add a few more rankings

Overall {this will contain all the aspects of the review}: The plot you have chosen can not be commented on, as you are writing and explaining a particular myth/fact of the Hindus. So keeping this aside, we move on to the grammar and the vocabulary. Both the things are pretty well, but you need to focus some more on the tenses. You have excellent writing skills. 

The dialogues and description felt real and one could easily imagine the setting, the plot style, and the characters. However, you must add the character sketch in the blurb or give some introduction to them in a specific part of the book to make the stuff more clear to the readers. Also, as you have used face claims in the cover, it would be good if you add a character sketch and if not, have a common cover with no face claim. 

The second option seems better to me. However, it is completely your choice. Also, a reader would really enjoy reading your book as it is unique and I haven't seen many authors/directors take up this mythology from the Ramayan. I would have loved to read the book if I had found the book on my own and not been asked to review it. The book is really well written, with just some minor mistakes in the appearance otherwise you are good to go.