Two Girls, One Destiny written by nikoleelrose
I'll start with the beginning of your story. I feel like you have a lot of run-on sentences in the prologue but it could just be me. The rest of it was really intriguing but I got confused in the first chapter. I couldn't exactly tell what was happening. The letter was really confusing. I had no idea who wrote it because it was addressed to Tom, but it said "Tom Riddles compositions really always seem to set her off."
When you didn't talk about how her mother died that was also really intriguing. It made me feel like I had to read at least to that point if not further. Even the first few chapters really messed with my emotions. I wanted to say you're doing a wonderful job with the book and I hope you keep writing!
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