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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
Here we have an oc for what I think is an original universe (?) by apsararodrigo
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding/character information
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For a general character, this is pretty good. You haven't done anything wrong and this works for a character. All I can really say is that developing her further and adding more details wouldn't be a bad idea. For example, most people have more than one hobby and her hobby could also play into her personality. Stuff like that.
Relationships
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As long as these relationships make sense in the universe and add to the characters development, then there's not much I can really say here except that more development and detail is always a good thing.
Backstory
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I recommend adding more detail and some important events because most people have some kind of significant thing to them going on, even when you're 14, no matter how minor it may be. So just plan this more and add more information.
Other
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Honestly, don't know what to say here. Normally people have more then one skill, even if it's at something silly, so maybe add more abilities? Idk, this information wasn't required on the form so I'm not in much of a place to comment on it.
Stats
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These stats are balanced and fine. Nothing to say here.
Final thoughts This character is pretty good and there's a lot going for it. Honestly, I just think you need to flesh her out more and develop her personality and backstory further, which would really help add to the character and make her better.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
