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Coolio probably the most common universe I look at.
Character information
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Alright this works for the most part but I think you need to build up on these more and add more detail especially in personality and description. Description wise maybe just add body type and weight and stuff like that. I think you have to work on the personality more though because you've only give her one trait here which makes her come across as a one note character. Make sure to state stuff like whether she's introverted or extroverted, how she acts around her friends, family, whether she's brave or not. Stuff like that.
Relationships
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These are fine just make sure that they effect the character and help develop her. Also try to be careful with her girlfriend because you don't want to make her romance the whole point of her character.
Backstory
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Sorry you've lost me here a bit, you haven't really given me much to work with since you say she's dropped out of college? But I thought she was 16? You also haven't told me about any of her school life or family life outside of her grandfather so definitely work on details and her actual childhood and past. Like why couldn't they afford to look after her? Does she have any distinct memories of her past? Just little things.
Other
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Cool quirk that's not overpowered. Maybe come up with that she can only regrow them and change their shape so much before she gets tooth ache or something.
Stats
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Stats make sense and are balanced no issues here.
Final thoughts This character has pretty good concepts and decent ideas but I think you need to add more details and develop her further so that she feels more realistic and works in the universe better.
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