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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Okay cool, though this probably should class as an original universe set in medern society.
Character information
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o far this is actually very good. He's well described and thought out and gives a good picture of his character. However, that does not mean it's perfect. For his description you could add body type, face shape, eye shape etc. As far as his personality goes, he's overwhelmingly negative, so I suggest adding a couple of more positive traits to him to make him feel more realistic.
Relationships
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These relationships work fine considering his personality but I suggest developing the further and adding more detail so that they feel more realistic and thought out.
Backstory
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Alright so this Backstory works but I feel like you need to build up the relationships and introductions of people more along with adding some more positive points in his life, even if it's just as small as a sweet moment with his sister.
Stats
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Stats are balanced enough so there's no issues here.
Final thoughts I like him a lot I have to say, but you have to be careful making characters so negative because it can feel unrealistic and forced. I'm not saying that he is, but you have to be careful. Work on developing him more and adding more detail and he should be good.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
