Review 83 // Hartley Smalders

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Here is a review for TEENSPIRIT--

My comments will be in bold

Basics and grounding

Alright sounds cool but those names are scarily similar so be careful with that because it's easy for the reader to mix them up

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Alright sounds cool but those names are scarily similar so be careful with that because it's easy for the reader to mix them up.

Character information

She sounds pretty interesting as far as things go

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She sounds pretty interesting as far as things go. There's nothing here but I recommend adding to her and developing some point of her personality to really get to know your own character better.

Relationships

These are fine but they need more development and additions to flesh out the relationship and make sure they develop the character and add to her further

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These are fine but they need more development and additions to flesh out the relationship and make sure they develop the character and add to her further.

Backstory

Backstory

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Okay, this works for the character but just like everything else, I recommend adding more details, especially to her younger years and add some more reasoning for her actions

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Okay, this works for the character but just like everything else, I recommend adding more details, especially to her younger years and add some more reasoning for her actions.

Other

Pretty cool, this works got nothing to say here

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Pretty cool, this works got nothing to say here.

Stats

These stats are pretty balanced so I don't have anything to add here

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These stats are pretty balanced so I don't have anything to add here.

Extra

Cool little addition here, it makes sense

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Cool little addition here, it makes sense.

Final thoughts
I quite like this character, she sounds pretty good for the most part. All I can really think of doing is developing her more and adding more to her in order to make her feel more fleshed out and individual.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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