Review 152 // Steve Donaldson

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Here is a review for zazalord

My comments will be in bold

Basics and grounding

You should probably think over how this would work but it sounds pretty neat

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You should probably think over how this would work but it sounds pretty neat.

Character information

This is pretty good for the most part but I have a bone to pick with his personality

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This is pretty good for the most part but I have a bone to pick with his personality. Obviously people can act different around different people however, most people almost always have some definate traits. So you need to figure out a couple of those so we know what personality type and stuff he is. Like is he extroverted? Introverted? Stuff like that since we don't know.

Relationships

I applaud you for implementing traditions and sticking to them though I feel this could be confusing

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I applaud you for implementing traditions and sticking to them though I feel this could be confusing. Be sure to develop these relationships and make sure they help grow the character.

Backstory

Backstory

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