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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Alright this can be an interesting concept to work with.
Character information
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I really like her design and she sounds interesting but you haven't told me anything about her personality, and that is probably the most important part of making a character. So, I recommend developing her personality and writing it down in a descriptive paragraph in order to have something to go off and develop her further.
Relationships
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I guess this makes sense, since she's a demon and all. Maybe naming who created her and who her friends are would add to this though.
Backstory
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This is interesting and I like the concept of making new terrors from body parts, but I think adding more detail and coming up with more significant points in her life could really add to this character and make her feel more fleshed out.
Other
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This is fine I guess, I don't actually ask for this information lol so I'm not sure what to say.
Stats
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I recommend lowering some of these stats because they're pretty high and we want characters to be as balanced as possible.
Final thoughts I like the concepts and design of this character, but like most characters I review it needs more development and additions. Definitely work on getting her personality scripted and sorting out that aspect. Apart from that, good job.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you of course do not have to listen to what I've said. This us all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
