Review 97 // B

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Here is another review for the other half of this for nothing_blah0

This is shorter then my previous review to avoid repeating information.

My comments will be in bold

Basics and grounding

Already given my thoughts on this

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Already given my thoughts on this.

Character information

Character information

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This is a pretty interesting dynamic, even if I've seen it before, that doesn't make it bad

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This is a pretty interesting dynamic, even if I've seen it before, that doesn't make it bad. My only real problem here is that B is meant to be the less intelligent of the two but he has the ability to knit without seeing. I don't know about you but I find knitting pretty tricky.

Relationships

Same as what I said in the previous review

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Same as what I said in the previous review.

Backstory / Other

Backstory / Other

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The characters balance eachother out well, but again I want to know more about their past

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The characters balance eachother out well, but again I want to know more about their past. You keep referencing that they've escaped, what's the story about that? You haven't told be much about their past or anything like that, whilst their abilities are interesting, I need more information.

Stats

Again, don't break stat boundaries but the rest are fine

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Again, don't break stat boundaries but the rest are fine.

Final thoughts
Basically the same as what I said in the last review. You gotta develop this more and add more detail. Focus on balancing them out more because pairs work well when they're completely balanced, but that isn't as big of an issue.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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