"Name: Harper McCloud
That's pretty. Does that cloud have significance to her character?
Age: 25
That can be cliche considering if she works at STAR Labs. Since she would barely be a college graduate.
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Straight
Fandom: The Flash
AYE
Backstory: Harper had been an orphan for as long as she could remember. EEK Orphan that's pretty clicheShe could barely remember her family. She had no idea where they were, or if they were even alive. Harper was all alone. At a very young age, Harper was taken by social workers and put into foster care. One family she was placed into, lived in Central City. It seemed as though Harper began to have a good life ahead of her. Yet the foster family that she was in, couldn't take care of her anymore. It was Joe West who took her in. Ummmm really?He recognized the girl as his daughter's best friend. He gave her a home and made her feel belonged.
If this isn't cliche I don't know what is. Of course she's adopted by Barry's foster parents.
Appearance: long fiery red hair that does to her mid back, stormy grey eyes, delicate clean skin, skinny, has some curves, thick calves, has some muscle. she usually wears black clothes, and doesn't care too much about her hair
Does she dye her hair red or is it naturally like that? I'm assuming its naturally like that if she doesn't care too much about it. In that case, that's very cliche. There's tons of normal looking meta humans. Maybe she could have black hair with dyed red streaks that's she's very high maintenance about.
Personality: sarcastic, snarky, rude(ish), confident, can be caring and loving once she gets to know you, short tempered, loud, pessimistic, agressive, cunning, devious, dishonest, flirtatious, impatient, very lazy and naughty
I like her personality a lot.
Species: Human/ Meta-human
Strengths: Is very tough, she took martial arts and gymnastics when she moved in with Joe and Iris West. Harper is ver loyal and able to stand her ground easily, she does not back down in an argument. She's very quick. Harper can persuade people easily.
I like that too. She sounds like me.
Weaknesses: Because she lost her family, Harper can get very emotional and weak when someone uses her past against her. She is always afraid of losing someone close to her, which is why she doesn't tend to stay close to many people
Pretty cliche but you know whatever floats your boat
Powers: Harper is a superhero along side the Flash. Since she is a meta-human, she has the power to absorb other powers from other meta humans and manipulate them as her own
So basically every possible power? That's Mary Sue. Give her one power with tons of faults and setbacks she can overcome.
Friends: Barry Allen, Matt Sylas (an OC), Iris West, Caitlin Snow and Cisco Ramon
I'd give her a lot more OC friends
Enemies: Dr. Wells (Reverse Flash) and any other evil meta-humans makes sense
Overall, you've fallen into the trap of a girl with fiery hair and an infinite set of powers used to float her through the plot unharmed. Give her some OC friends, switch up her look and her powers. She has tons of potential! I love her personality.
Mary Sue rating:50% (the look, the powers)
Originality Rating: 60%
Interest Grade: 100% I'd love to read this!
Admin: Angelica
Statement: making their red coats redder with blood stains.
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