Fandom: Harry PotterName: Lilly named her Irish, but when her parents died, her foster parents named her Lillian Hartwait her mother was lily potter? and then her fosters parents named her after her dead mother?Age: for the sake of this review, 11Gender: femaleBackstory: When Voldemort came to kill everyone, he bypassed Iris because the prophecy called for a boy not a girl i feel like voldemort would just kill her anyway.when the Potters died, Dumbledore took her to a different family from the Dursleys because professor McGonagall suggested that she didn't live there since she didn't need to. (Since she didn't have Lilly's protection so she didn't have to go to the Dursleys )Her parents lover allot and she grew up like a normal child with the occasional burst of magic.. One day, she met Harry at the zoo (Because it was Dudley's birthday) and they took a liking to eachother thats a really big coincidence . She got her letter at 11 and she went to Hogwarts where she got sorted into Slytherin. Because Of this, she was often called a traitor because Voldemort was in Slytherin and all that Stuff. She discovers the room of requirement and she constantly uses it to practice magic and read in peace and out of the way of haters. In the Train, she met Elva and they became friends easily. i see this plot a lotAppearance: dark amber hair, green eyes, same stature of Harry, (small and skinny) Species: witchStrength: she can do wandless magic but she could only do it a bit in her first year, but she got better as the years went on (Like magic that follows strong emotions of young wizards) of course she can do wandless magicWeakness: you can always see her emotions clearly on her face, she is easily offended and her mouth can sometimes get her into trouble Powers: wandless magic, magic with wands, usual wizard magic, becomes an animus in her 6 year after the death of her godfather. of course she becomes an animagus. Friends: Elva, Elva's brother Cal, (Not best friends, but friends all the same) her twin brother, Harry. (Again, not best friends, but they talk quite a Bit)Enemies: she constantly wonders if she's slowly turning evil, but she tries to help the order of the Phoenix but it can be a bit awkward. Voldemort
Overall, this whole OC is very cliche. she's a twin potter who's sorted into Slytherin, is considered a traitor, becomes an animagus, and can do wandless magic. don't worry, we all start out with an OC like this. I like that she has OC friends. Maybe she could be adopted by the potters right before they do, and she could be sorted into hufflepuff or ravenclaw. or maybe harry doesn't like having a twin sister and doesn't care where she's sorted
Mary Sue Rating: 80%
Originality Rating: 40%
Interest Grade: 90% even though she's cliche, she has great potential
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