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The Darkest Embrace [Nanya]

Book: The Darkest Embrace  
Author: mansi12x
Reviewer: nanyapixie6
Number of chapters read: 8

Title: very intriguing, and well dark. I like it

Cover: very dark and pretty and captures the title. I like the fonts used, a bit too plain though, Adding some elements or borders or using a different font for the title and pen name or using a different font for any word of the title like making it larger than the others(a suggestion), I feel like more can be done with the cover to make it more intriguing.

Blurt/Description: one word YES! I loved the description the hook, the sentences, and the grammar, Very well written descriptive and tells you about the book. I found no fault with this. Though the first paragraph was too long but its all good Originality/creativity: a little cliche bad boy good girl but i think psychotic Sts the boy more The story is kind of relatable but I haven't seen much yet, probably because the story is still starting. Your way of writing is very creative. I enjoyed it

Grammar/punctuation: very good use of grammar and punctuation. I enjoyed seeing no errors as I read. It was professional and enticing but in the last chapter, I noticed an error just one so Good work

Plot: cliche but very intriguing and dangerous too.
Writing style: I liked the first chapter but noticed that the teacher asked her to come to the front to introduce herself to the class. I don't think that happens in colleges unless in your settings they do. Also the way she and Ava suddenly became friends seemed rushed. I loved the opening statements in each chapter, it really drew me in
A suggestion: when writing a person's pov, make it different from the rest of the text in the chapter by making it bold, Caps, Italicised or Underlined
Also, the Speeches and the description are too bombarded. Maybe try spacing them out more. Like if two people are having a dialogue, let their conversations be on another line or paragraph
I really enjoyed your writing style and your use of good figure of speech

Character development: Kristen has been feisty from the start and Aiden is kind of psychotic. I haven't noticed any character development yet but I hope for one in the future where Kristen isn't scared when he raises his voice and other development too

Overall enjoyment. This was very well written, I enjoyed the way the book was written a little too much. And it was a very good read though it's underrated. You don't come across very well-written underrated books all the time.

If I were to rate this, I would give it a solid 8 for such good descriptions and professionalism though I still hope to see more from the book. The chapters were short so I'm assuming there's still more to come

KEEP up the good work!

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