Book: Hello Butterflies
Author: txxha_red_chen
Reviewer: DHBurnside
Chapters read: 2
Trailer-1
A lot is going on and I found it hard to follow the story. I think we need more depth to the story, like who are these people talking to each other? What do they look like? Where are they having these conversations? What brought them to have these conversations?
Iris
This chapter is better written. We have more depth to the characters with real scene building.
Overall, I think this story has good potential but it reads like a rushed outline of a story. I think it needs a lot more development and work to fill out and improve the story but if you’re willing to put in the work I think the storyline would be worth writing.
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