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REVIEW#93

GENRE: FANFICTION, VAMPIRE, WEREWOLF

BY: -TAELICIOUS-
STATUS: ONGOING
RATE: 8/10
CONTAINING: Mature, boyxboy

SUMMARY:

"I'm addicted to you."Taehyung is a university student who attends Colorado University in Denver. In class, he studies art. But on his own time, he finds interest in mythical-supernatural creatures. Being in his second year of school, he runs into something he studies more than anything else...A vampire-an alpha. The two become close and Taehyung is sure the vampire is close enough to trust with his feelings about him. At least, all the way up until some of the vampire's most gruesome and bloody secrets are revealed to him. May he blame gravity for falling, but may he also turn the other way.

REVIEW:

First of all, I would like to thank the author for the wait. so let's get started on the review. now for the story itself, the plot is really interesting, for me, the plot is just the beginning of the story, so I will be hoping more on the build-up of the story.

Second, I want to advise the author to just chill down, not that it's a bad thing to move on forward tot he story but I think it will really make the story much more liver if you could elaborate more on the characters chemistry, at some part of the story and characters I find it a bit too rush, so I was hoping for the author to explain more, I would really say that you already laid out the characters nicely now it's time for the characters development.

What I find in a good fantasy (werewolves and vampire) story is that they are written raw, that means they act like their nature, the characters itself need to be able to play the character, as I was reading the story, I didn't really feel like I was reading a vampire story more of a romance story. 

SPOILER AHEAD

So I think it's pretty good if you can make hoseok edgier and a bit rough since he portrays a werewolf (a tiny reckless and cheeky) so it could really build up tension with Seokjin since they are different species, jungkook and Taehyung too, they are two different species so it'd be good to build up a bit tension enough to separate their nature and then later after your story you could write a similar nature.

but don't worry all of this could be fix over time as you upgrade and beside this is just a suggestion, you could always write a different style but I find those kinds of things helps build up a character.

another thing is that I see you put up a lot of notice, it really is a personal preference but I really like a nice and neat book to read, so after I'm done with those notice I delete them to make the book less messy but again it's a preference.

But overall I think you did a good job and it you keep a constant update you'll do a great job and I believe you could really be a big hit, so I will always support you! Please don't take this review to the heart this are some suggestion.