Name: Needle
A fair name. I don't think I've seen it before, so gj.
Name Reason: Was Hatched Very Thin; Barb Was Smaller Than Normal SandWing Barbs
Is there a reason for this deformity?
Age: 9
Okay, but do keep in mind that this means Needle is an adult and is around 19 in human maturity.
Gender: Female
Okay.
Tribe: SandWing
Sandy. But wouldn't it be SandWing/IceWing?
Rank: Peasant
pEAsaNT
Okay, lmao — having a "peasant" OC is pretty rare tbh, so gj.
Heritage: 60% SandWing 40% IceWing
How does this work
Wouldn't it be 75% SandWing and 25% IceWing?
You can't just pull numbers out of a magic bag and slap it onto genes lol
A few other things —
Why is SandWing/IceWing mixes so common? Like I see them everywhere. Everywhere.
Not a big fan of hybrids, not a big fan of extremely common hybrids, but I will say the rank and species match pretty well.
Family:
Mother: Parch
Parch is canon,
Father: Frost
And Frost is pretty overused
Hatchmates: Amber, Barb, Cactus, Cacti (Those last two are twins)
Okay no
Cacti is literally the same word as Cactus, just plural
Imagine if I have a pair of RainWing twins, and I name one Strawberry and the other one Strawberries
It's the same thing and I feel like it's kinda just an excuse to not have to come up with names
And I get that, but maybe you could at least look up different kinds of cacti?
and Pin
Twin: Pin
Oo twin
Siblings: Cicada, Heatwave, Pin
Uncles: Hyena, Jackal
Aunts: Gleam, Gila
Cousins: Lizard, Locust, and Python
Okay so overall the names are really good, just not the names of the parents and the twins Cactus and Cacti
Personality
-Is Loyal To Siblings
Always a good trait; MudWings don't have to be the only dragons loyal to their siblings
-Strong and good fighter
-Quick thinker
-Hates Thorn (Wanted Blister to win the war)
I have a feeling Mamba and Needle wouldn't get along
-Suspicious about most dragons from opposite tribes
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WoF OC Reviews
RandomWings of Fire OC Reviews! Not my original idea. (If you don't know what OCs are, they are "Original Characters") Also, yes, I'm aware - there are about two thousand of these kinds of books. I know. And probably nobody's going to see this book.