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જ Peregrinate જ ☾ Narayani ☽

Reviewer's name: Narayani_writes

Book name: Peregrinate

Author's name : sarada3003

Title: 6 /10
The title is quite simple. It directly hits with the meaning of the plot. But I would suggest the author at least give it a subtitle or slightly edit the original one so as to make the book worth reading.

Cover: 5.5/10
Talking about the cover, it's quite simple. As the story revolves around the girl and the castle, the current cover actually holds all the elements. But the readers might not attract to it since the elements aren't blended together properly. In my suggestion, the cover should be edited with proper font, color, elements, and author's name.

Blurb:  6.5/10
The blurb is quite okay. Although there are slight mistakes, it makes the reader think quite about the plot. The line 'ensnares her in her clutches only to deliver her', contains multiple uses of her which sounds absurd while reading. You can add a more intriguing blurb or any part from the book which would compel the readers to peep inside.

Prologue/ Starting of the book: 7/10
The prologue is quite small. Actually, the prologue is meant to give a slight hint for the book or something else. But, since the prologue is very small and whole narrative. Although the author has mentioned below she has intentionally done so, yet I felt at least she could show two or three dialogues with her father.

Originality: 10/10
The plot is absolutely original and there are no doubts about it. I must admit the author has properly attempted to mold the story in its finest form.

Plot: 5/10
The plot is okay. The story is quite simple and it is actually going very slow. At some points, the plot becomes boring without any twists and turns going plainly.

Grammar: 6/10
Talking about the tenses, the words have been properly chosen which many of the authors lack. But the marks deduced here are for the framing of the sentences. The grammar and spelling mistakes are visible in many parts. Wrong conjunctions and prepositions are used at places that were not required. In the very first part of the first chapter, one could see a lack of punctuation marks. The description there needed commas and no full stops. At a place, the author has written 'I was bit skeptical' which should be 'I was bit sceptical'. Only then it makes sense. There's a line which says 'I had hoped this would be...'. But it should go as ' I hoped this would be...' The sentence 'countryside was quite a change '. In this, you can replace the word quite a change with quite different. There are these small things that make the readers distract from the story.

Character development: 4.5/10
The descriptions couldn't tell the readers the actual traits of the character. Each character could have been given more scopes to develop. The protagonist Maisie too develops very slowly. Better descriptions could have been used for the same.

Writing skills: 6/10
I am quite okay with it but not fully satisfied. The main reason behind the same is the long narrations with no dialogues and twists. The only dialogues which are added in the book, for them, I will suggest writing them in italics or different styles to differentiate the texts from dialogues. The characters lack the portrayal of emotions. One couldn't feel what exactly is happening in the character's mind and heart. I would suggest the author look into this.

Overall enjoyment: 5/10

Total: 61.5 /100

Special note: I appreciate the hard work of the author but I would say she needs to work harder. Although her plot is quite good, she needs to work, study and execute it more properly so as to make the book more interesting and readable.

Thanks for choosing me as a reviewer.