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જ Mehrmah જ ☾Sri☽

Title: Mehrmah

Author: demenpixie

Reviewer: Sri_999

Title: ⅘

The title is very beautiful. Just like most of the other Urdu words, it gives you an aesthetic feel. However, I believe that you should add the meaning of the title in the blurb because people might not know its meaning, take me as an example- I do know a few Urdu words but I am not familiar with a lot of them so adding the meaning would be helpful.

Cover: 5/5

The cover is simply beautiful. It gives you those desi vibes which simply make you go ♡'･ᴗ･'♡. The font style and size are just perfect, you have also added all the necessary information about the book which is a plus point. I was attracted towards the book when I saw the cover so it is perfect for me.

Blurb: 8/10

I don't have much to say about the blurb. It tells us that there will be short stories and it is like an index so I don't have much problem with it.

Opening Chapter: 5/10

I am considering the 'CONTENT' part as the first chapter here because it tells us about the stories and introduces us to the main characters. You did a good job in introducing the characters but there were MANY grammatical mistakes-

"belonging to a politician family" isn't correct it should either be "belonging to a political family" or "She belongs to a family of politicians"

"What happens when he happens to be become a part of someone wrath" Instead it should be "What happens if he becomes a part of someone's wrath"

"Her father being her only support in this evil world never left her side," here I think you should've used a full stop instead of a comma.

"but when we say everyone gonna die" here it should be "everyone's"

"A woman on a mission, disguise as male university students killing boys..." It should be-

"A woman on a mission who is disguised as a male university student kills boys...."

Also, you have made some spelling errors.

And there are many more mistakes such as those mentioned above. You have also used the word dominating a number of times which has honestly annoyed me a little, I would've preferred if you didn't use it so many times or if you used synonyms of the word. 

Flow/Plot: 8/10

The flow is decent as well and the plot is good. It keeps the reader engaged in the story and the religious element might not be comfortable for some but in my opinion, it makes the story even more beautiful and a person can relate more to it.

Writing style: 8/10

Your writing style is wonderful, you have a good vocabulary and you are good at structuring sentences but the only problem I see is your grammar. There are many grammatical errors and they are very prominent. I suggest that you rewrite or maybe do heavy editing of the story since there are major errors and typos as well as spelling errors. When you do this your story will become better.

Overall: 38/50

Overall, I do see potential in the book as well as in you. If you focus more on your grammar then it will enhance the book and the readers will have fun while reading the story. Thank you for choosing me as your reviewer, I hope this review was helpful.

Have a lovely day!