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Book: The Promise
Author: author_ankita
Reviewer: RoasterSultana
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Title: 7.5/10
The name suits the story well since the plot itself is about a promise. But I believe the name has been overused so it won't get points for originality.

Cover: 9/10
The cover was clean, the color scheme was perfect. The worst thing that ruins a cover is messiness, and I certainly give you points for avoiding that. But the cover picture is also a bit common in my taste, I guess it's because of Pinterest.

Blurb: 10/10
The length was perfect, and you didn't add unnecessary points. You formed the sentences in a dramatic way which can get readers interested in reading.

Plot: 7.5/10
Original plot; and the diary writing part was fun. Just kind of predictable because I've read the "best friends apart" kind of trope in many other stories. Also a bit slow paced but it's alright considering that the timing keeps going back and forth in the chapters.

Originality: 9/10
The best part that I liked about the story is its originality! The diary-sharing part is cute and, to my fancy, original.

Grammar: 10/10
Perfect grammar and almost no mistakes. Good sentence formations. Adding a few fancy words would look good.

Characters: 7/10
The cast of characters was interesting but had almost no depth except for the main two protagonists. Not many characters, it only appears that the characters that matter most are only the male lead's li(s). The name choices were good, but a jockey named Jonathan sounds a bit...common.

Writing: 8/10
Good grammar helps make the writing clear, and you nailed that part. Adding a few uncommon or, let's say fancy words would make it look more sophisticated. Sentence formation is also good but just quite direct.

Instead of writing: I swallowed once, not letting come out, and extended my hand to pick up the diary from inside the closet. I might have lost her, but I have a part of her with me forever. At least. This diary.

You can write: I swallowed, not allowing my tears to come out, and extended my arm to pick the diary out from the closet. I might have lost her, but a part of her is with me forever, at least. This diary.

Instead of writing: Since I decided not to go to school today, I stayed in my bed late, trying my best to not think about what that guy might do to Eve in my absence. It is hurting, but it's for the best, I tell myself. Just then, our doorbell rang.

You can write: Since I decided to skip school that day, I stayed up in my bed late, trying my best to not think about what that guy might do to Eve during my absence. It hurts, but it's probably for the best, I told myself. And right then, our doorbell rang.

Chapters: 9/10
The chapter length was perfect. The different scenarios and timing were fun, but I would advise stating the timing for example "__ years forward" to prevent getting readers confused. I did not have any problem with that, but I only realized the time setting after reading half the chapter and it might take others more time for that.

Overall Enjoyment: 9/10
I enjoyed the story very much! It moved quickly from a melancholy to a happy setting, opening different moods for the reader in the book. You have a good way of conveying emotion through writing. Just a bit more originality to season it up and make it unpredictable, and the story will become one of my favorites. It has a lot of much potentials.

In conclusion: 86/100 I enjoyed reading this story, it was adorable and emotional. Never was interested in these kinds of stories so it surprised me a bit. It's really interesting and you definitely know how to get someone hooked on your story!