Bluebell Review Chamber [CLOSED]

જ Love At Dawn જ ☾ Claire☽

Author: LiebeKlara

Reviewer: ClaireMari29

Notes To The Author: Thanks for being my 5th client, and from here, I'll be publishing your review, everything in this review will be based upon my opinions and my beliefs, and I hope so you'll understand.

Cover, Title, and Blurb: 25/30

Okay, I rated this part as 25 due to the matter you only made the first letter of your title to be in Capital, even though you can make the rest of it to be big letters too, eg: Love At Dawn. What also made me rate this work as 25, even though the title was fine, and you had defined the blurb well, it's all because of the cover, it didnt actually hooked me at first glance, I can suggest that

you can make it more beautiful, try to get inspired from some ancient title of stories, it can be typography, after all as I can see in your cover at the same time.

Grammar and Writing Style: 26/30

To rate your writing style, even if it's your first time to write a story, you used 3rd POV writing, which is good, yet we had a few problems in your grammar and writing style, as I can see from the first chapter, some titles are not a big letter in the first letter, and so there's also a spacing error in it, as I kept reading few chapters of your work, I can see a bit of spark in where you

wanted to write your work as descriptive. The only way you can do to improve are two things, first was to understand more English tenses, read more English works, as they said, to read is to write, and from there, I believed that you need to know more. Or second, hiring an editor in who can help you develop your work better.

Storyline and Plot: 28/30

We had no issues with this part, I can see how you made the plot as like the ancient love story concepts and it seems new to me at the same time, after reading 5 chapters, I can see the story pace being steady, not fast or slow, which is good at the same time.

Reviewer and Reader Satisfaction: 8/10

I believed so far that the only improvement you can do relies on the cover and so be your writing, I believed you can improve, you had passion for it, yet you need to understand more of the English vocab and grammar to make your story well, as for your cover, I believed it needs to be changed as possible.

Total: 87/100