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જ Strawberry Shaped Love જ ☾Assie☽

Book: Strawberry Shaped Love
Author: Ipsitalali
Reviewer: NotAnAsterism

● Presentation:
The cover is beautiful and the title is intriguing. Keeping that in mind, when it comes to the blurb, it would be better if you left spaces between sentences/paragraph(s).
For example:

Aurora Hart, a 27-year-old grumpy CEO of a gaming firm, enjoys nothing more than making games and drinking wine, which is a serious concern, but anyways back to the plot... When hearts begin to follow her even though she tries to flee, she meets an attractive barista (who is actually a cop). Who knew she'd end up on a cruise ship going for Alaska with a handsome flirty cop in her bed? Not to mention the serial killer that is loose on the ship. Their past, as well as their emotions, catch up with them as they try not to become the serial killer's next victim.
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Book 1: Fruity Love Series (CAN BE READ AS A STANDALONE!)
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Book cover and banners by @CrimsonShadowMask and @lantea- @TheThroneCommunity

● Grammar/Vocabulary:
Your main focus should be the punctuations. What I've noticed so far is that your words fit well but there is inconsistent/unnecessary use of punctuations.
Consider the example(s):
Chapter 1: I just went to a coffee shop and requested for an espresso... Can be written as: I just went to a coffee shop and requested an espresso but all the baristas were dressed in pink with every corner of their shop painted the same colour.
This makes your sentences/paras more evocative, descriptive and increases the word limit.

● Character Development:
You need to make descriptive writing a priority when it comes to the characters. This is to showcase their backgrounds and personalities with clarity.
In other words, you'll need to replace sets of dialogues with descriptions.

● Plot Development:
There aren't many changes required. If you follow up with your characters, the plot will automatically develop.

● Overview:
The book has a stable and well thought plot. If focused on the suggestions that have been given to you, the book's plot will develop in a much more positive manner. Overall, a good read.