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જ Under Cover Love જ ☾Yashi☽

Book name: Under Cover Love

Author: rrryyy2004

Reviewer: Yashhiiiee

Title: 9/10 You have a nice title there, considering your book is about two people who are bound to fall in love when they are supposed to be under cover. But I think you can make it "Love UnderCover". For me personally, I think it will sound better.

Cover: (8/10) It's also fine but I think the face placement is a bit strange. If you can find a picture of them together and then get it to a graphic designer, who would help you with making a nice cover.

Blurb: (9/10) About the blurb, there's some grammar mistakes. Also, if you look at the first 3 lines, you've just told what's the book about. I believe you could change some wordings, so that it leaves the reader hanging and guessing what will happen in the book. Other than that, it's prettt good and gives a good amout of information about your characters.

Storyline: (14/15) You have a really good storyline there. I like how you started your book by telling us about the characters and then the story proceeded. I have no idea what the show is, so I don't know if it's your own storyline but if it is, good job!!

Characters: (10/15) The characters are really well thought of, and well written. But I have a suggestion for you here. Since you say that VR is a bit hard toned and a meany, it will take some time for him to crack up right? The first time they met, he said, "I will not able forgive myself is something happens to her." On the second meating, he's like, "haye kya sundar ladki hai(something similar)." I think it's a bit weird and contradictory to his character.

Grammar and Punctuation: (10/20) Now that's something that needs work. There are many instances where there are grammatical mistakes, wrong choise of words, overuse of punctuations, like, "?????" "..........." try to avoid these. It's nothing an editor can't fix so just make sure to get them corrected.

Overall enjoyment: (10/10) I have to say, despite these many grammatical and punctuation mistakes, I couldn't stop reading it and it was very fun to read. The way you connect with your readers is so cute. I love it, and I'm now one of them.

Conclusion: (7/10) I'm sorry but I had to be honest with you, because I'm here to get you to improve your mistakes, also, get an editor, or contact me, my dm is always open for you guys. But if we get them corrected, you have a really good story building for yourself and you will be able to get more people to enioy your story in a good flow.

P.S ~ You requested a review from me because you wanted me to tell you both the good things and the parts where there's scope for improvement in your story so please don't feel disheartened. You're talented and don't let anyone tell you otherwise. And obviously it's totally up to you if you want to consider my feedback or not. Good luck for your book <33 ~ Yashi