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Note! These are two short stories. For organizational purposes, I'll assess things like story flow and plot separately, but I'll put all logistical errors together. I'll use OE for Orient Express and ES for Eleusinia Shrine. I gave separate marks for each and then averaged them.
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i. COVERS & TITLES
Not all readers may agree with me here, but I love your covers. I like that they all match and follow the same format. I'm a big fan of vibrant colours on dark backgrounds, so I firmly believe that these covers are effective. I say not all may agree because they are a little simplistic. I would recommend making the subtitle more visible--I couldn't read them at all. I would send the current designs you have to an artist and see what they could do for brightening them up. I have a reading list full of artists that would love to take on this project.
The titles of your short stories are wonderful and concise. They very clearly represent the story and aren't too abstract. I have no issues with your titles.
ii. BLURBS
Both of your blurbs are super tiny little one-sentence descriptions. Although I like the mystery of them, I'd have to recommend lengthening them. You could keep what you have, then add in a divider and do a light description below. It might just make readers more likely to click on the story if they have some extra info.
OE: 1 1 / 1 5 ES: 1 1 / 1 5
Final: 1 1 / 1 5
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i. GRAMMAR
You have very few grammar errors. I only found two:
