I just love your book cover. It kinda tells what really the story is about. It gives the insight of the story and is attractive to readers. The cover and the story really are in sync which most people don't realise to make their book perfect as possible.
Title : 10/10
You chose the most intimidating title for your book. Burning desire really ignited the spark of excitement in me and I really am in love with your book.
Blurb/ description: 9/10
Although you described the situations and related past times, I felt a bit incomplete, not knowing the whole details. Little more details, the story will be hella good.
There are so many things happening at the same time. So try to elaborate on them and not go too fast.
Creativity and originality: 9/10
I like your story's plot. It's much more different than others and interesting. It was good when the story started but it took much longer for them to meet than I expected. It's new and very original. I especially loved that they have their demons but still are strong in front of the world.
Plot and flow : 18/20
I love the plot. To be honest, the story was going a bit slow. The story is about them and I couldn't see any chemistry in the first but later on, when Raymond's true feelings were surfacing. I started to love the plot.
The dance which took place in chapter 59, made me literally tear up. It's a beautiful story.
Character development: 9/10
I could imagine the personality development in both Raymond and jasmine. First off, they were a bit distant and sad that nothing would make them much happier than their past lives. Till the end, I observed a lot of change in both of them which was good. If there was a development of other characters in the end, it would have been much more interesting. I seriously want to know about the other characters like what are they doing or how are they coping? What happens to Andrew? etc..
Writing style, grammar etc : 9/10
I noticed some grammatical mistakes.. I hope you clear them out.
As per the writing style, it's good considering the plot. Expressing the character's feelings and their emotions would make readers understand them more.
Genre relevance : 10/10
It totally suits for young adult and romance genre. The romance, mature scenes, the passion between them was described very well.
Reader enjoyment : 9/10
I would totally recommend others to read your book. I kept reading till the end and it was the best ending I could have ever read. There was a lack of personal feelings but if you correct them, then everything's perfect.
Overall: 93/100
I really loved reading your book. Everything is good considering the plot and characters and the story. Correct your grammatical mistakes and make the story more about them. I loved the chemistry between Raymond and jasmine. There are just minor mistakes that you have to take care of. Don't take this in a bad way. I hope you keep writing and shine like a bright star. I can see the potential in you. Recognise your capabilities and your skills. All the best.
- Sahiti
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