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Reviewed by: Crazy LordsSword Book Title: The Guardian's Gift Author's Name: shiteutea
Title: 8/10
One of the best parts of your title is that it's specific and interesting. It begs the questions 'What is the gift?' and 'Who is the guardian?'
One thing I would like to point out. Looking at the title and cover, I did not think angels, which is an important aspect in your story.
Tips:
I would suggest including 'angel' in the title. That way the target readers just need to look at the title and know that this is a story about angels. If you do, forgo the Guardian part and just write 'The Angel's Gift'. 'The Guardian Angel's Gift' would be too clunky and awkward to say, and it's better to have titles readers can say without tripping over their words.
Cover: 10/10
I love the color palette you choose. The light, cottony pinks, purples, and blues really reflect the story, and I love how it looks like the sky. I love the stylized edges and the font as well.
Blurb: 8/10
Your blurb succeeds in all of the basics you need. Dramatic hooking statement, character description, moment of change and stakes. Well done!
What you still need is a little bit of life and flavor to your blurb. Spice and refinement are all you need to make your blurb spectacular.
Tips:
Simplify your blurb's hook. That would be the quotes. The problem with this comes in that you have two separate hooking quotes from different segments of the story. They're working at cross-purposes, which makes your hook chaotic and weak. Pick whichever one is the most intriguing and keep that one.
Let's move on to the character descriptions. They only tell us one or two facts about them. They don't bring the character to life.
The point of this part is to make the characters seem human. This is dependent on the tone, which is tough to explain. Let me give you an example, based on your blurb.
"God's favorite guardian angel, Jisoo, is at the end of her rope. Centuries of diligently protecting her charges eventually take their toll. Especially since Jisoo's most recent years have been spent protecting Seokjin, the clumsiest man she's ever been assigned. Even though she loves her job and the chances it gives her to observe humans and their wonderful lives, she's in desperate need of a break."
In this example, you can see that I've elaborated on the 'as a reward for her hard work' part later on. By including how long and how hard she's worked, I've increased the emotional pull of the reward. I've also given context as to why becoming human for a day might be something she'd consider a reward.
