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❄ VESPIAN EMERALDS [C.S] | SARA ❄

Reviewed by: Anusara12
Book Title: Vespian Emeralds - Chasing Secrets 
Author: Flame_of_Frost

Cover: 5/10

The cover of your book is nice but it isn't neat enough to attract the readers. There are a lot of elements on the cover that kinda look cluttered. It would put some readers off and even if they love the blurb, they would be hesitant to start reading. So, I would suggest you change the cover featuring only the main elements of the book. Make sure it is neat. It would attract more readers.

Title: 10/10

'Vespian Emeralds: Chasing Secrets' is the most apt title for this book. It gives off a mysterious vibe which will pique the interest of the readers.

Blurb/Description: 9/10

The blurb was apt and perfect. It gives us enough information to start the story. It piques the interest of the readers.

Creativity and originality : 10/10

The setting, the secret mission and the company names were nice and different from all the stories that I've ever come across. I adore that about your book.

Plot and Flow: 17/20

The plot was great, new and exciting for me. But the flow wasn't something that I loved about your book. Not because the flow wasn't uniform or perfect but it was kinda fast paced and doesn't really have much space for character development.

Character Development: 7/10

Though I loved your characters, I would say that I don't really know how well their bond is or their relationship with each other. Only if people knew how close each of them were with each other, people would be able to relate it to themselves better. Other than that I loved them.

Writing style, Grammar, spellings, etc.: 8/10

Your writing style was amazing. It was very much suitable for the fast paced action book. I loved how fast the story moved, yet, it didn't feel rushed or forced. It was smooth. I loved that about your book. I didn't find any spelling errors but I did find a few grammatical errors. There were not a lot of them but few editing and proofreading will help you get rid of those. Let me just point one or two for you.

"Now, to business, Secretary stated with a sigh placing a file on the polished table.

In this the quotation is left open and few punctuations are missing. It should have been,

"Now, to business," Secretary stated with a sigh, placing a file on the polished table.

"Oh, how about Devil Leap? It's run by, uhh....," Veronica trailed off, seeing who the managers of the company were.

Secondly, ellipses are always three dots, try to avoid adding more or less dots. [Though it might be a typo, it won't look neat to the readers]

"Oh, how about Devil Leap? It's run by, uhh...," Veronica trailed off, seeing who the managers of the company were.

These were really rare, when I mean rare it was really really really rare but it could still affect the flow of the readers. So, I would suggest you edit it.

Genre relevance: 10/10

This was definitely a fast paced action book. It also has some mystery and a thriller vibe to it.

Reader enjoyment and Communication with the readers: 10/10

I really enjoyed reading and reviewing your book. It was amazing and I loved how well written it was. If there is something that I would suggest, I would suggest you work on the book cover and edit your book. Other than that I loved it. Really sorry for the late review, Keep writing! All the best!

Overall: 86/100