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❄ LOMBF | RAVEN ❄

Reviewed by: Raven
Book title: LOMBF
Author Username: PurpleCatCritters

Cover:7|10

There aren't many problems with it, but it looks like a magazine's cover, which doesn't look that attractive. For this, I would recommend, maybe, adding more colors and fewer Letters.

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Title:8|10

The short form LOMBF doesn't really sound appropriate to the story, while I know the full form does, but it makes the title too long for anyone to read, the title also doesn't look, out of the box, for examples- Stolen Sweetheart, Tales of the Heart, Forever Admirer, Young Lies or something like that, sounds better.

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Blurb/description: 8|10

while the title suggests, lusting over my BFF, but the starting of the blurb, says "Marry me Acacia Jean Dawson" he said| which already sounds like these two already love each other, which destroys the curiosity of the reader, that is, if this love story will happen or not, and they're also few grammatical errors in the blurb itself, which is making it little difficult to read, I would suggest to go back and try to resolve them.

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Aptitude and originality:7|10

While the topic BFF to lovers seems done many a time, but not overdone because it depends on how the writer writes it, although I think you should try to add more events and complicate things a little, so the reader finds it interesting to read.

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Plot and flow: 15|20

For the plot, my ratings ain't accurate at all since the book ain't finished yet, although the accident always happening with Acacia makes it interesting, the book feels like ever going, the Incidents looks new every time and it just doesn't seem to have a fixed ending, so maybe work on that make a more prominent storyline.

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Grammar, writing style and spellings: 4|10

I am sorry for voting it this low, but there were many grammatical errors throughout the book, which made it difficult to read. But hey! Don't worry too improve those errors you can go to Gemme: Evermore - An editing shop, :).

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Genre Relevance: 10|10

Good job! That's a perfect 10, the genre was correct and fits well with the storyline, you did a great job in this!.

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Readers enjoyment.: 8|10

As I do have to admit I enjoyed the book so far, it's just it seems ever going and doesn't follow a single storyline, which sometimes makes it lengthy and boring for a reader.

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Overall 54|100

I can see myself reading the book, but it just seems overdone with the storyline already I would advise it to end at an appropriate time, whereas for the words it helped in really get into the book, as a reader I can feel the characters feeling, and myself in the story, relating and disagree with the chosen the characters to make, you did a great job in that. Just some things that need to be fixed, that I have already mentioned above. I definitely see potential in this book and also in you as a writer.

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Tips: I would like to say please don't get discouraged by a review or anything that happens, take them positively and also don't give up as a writer, I can see potential in you. Lastly, I hope this review will help you enhance your work.

Good luck- Raven

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