《Rose》 Ruby Red Threads

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Reviewer: therosepoetk
Written by: Akiramado

Okay, so I need to tell you right now that I am a huge fan of the whole “red strings of fate” trope. It’s a common plot device used within books, and usually all of the stories that I read surrounding it turn out to be pretty exceptional! Based on the title - which is captivating and descriptive in all the right ways - I can tell that you’ve got something special on your hands. The cover is so gorgeous and it reminded me of the classical painting of hands reaching towards each other. I am honestly struggling to find ways that you can improve this, even through the perfectly constructed blurb. I love how you are really inclusive with your readers in the opening, and choose to educate them instead of leaving them to fend for themselves with information that might not even be accurate.
I adore the comprehensive guides and introduction to everything, although I do admit that it is pretty overwhelming at first. If you are able to summarize everything really quickly and still keep the details you need with that, that would be great. The general opening of the story has a great prologue, and I am sensing some very heavy angst vibes in the story. I believe something that you could work on is the organization and the coherence of your story. I think that you can make all the pre-story information come at the beginning of the story, even before the prologue starts. I believe this allows readers to interpret the prologue and the first chapter with more of a connection, instead of having that overbearing amount of indirectly related information thrown at them in the middle ground. But overall, the plot has really been moving in a positive direction, and it’s wonderful so far. The characters are all interesting and have these sort of dynamics between each other that I am living for. However, I think that you can work more on their dialogues, as a huge way that people communicate is through their words to one another. But one thing that I do like is the emotional appeal, as it is a huge part of the tale you are trying to tell. You’ve done a great job with that, so you should be proud of yourself. Something else I think you can work on is a bit of the grammar, as when you transition between the perspectives of all the main characters, sometimes you get lost with the grammar of it all. But I want you to get more in the headspace of each character when you write, and don’t overwhelm yourself with too many characters and too many complexities. But overall, this was an incredibly refreshing read, and it really made my day. Keep up the wonderful work Akira!

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